Wednesday, January 14, 2015

Storytelling Week 1- Two Missing Children

MY dear, do you know,
How a long time ago,
Two poor little children,
Whose names I don't know,
Were stolen away on a fine summer's day,
And left in a wood, as I've heard people say.

And when it was night,
So sad was their plight,
The sun it went down,
And the moon gave no light.
They sobbed and they sighed, and they bitterly cried,
And the poor little things, they lay down and died.

And when they were dead,
The Robins so red
Brought strawberry-leaves
And over them spread;
And all the day long
They sung them this song:
"Poor babes in the wood! Poor babes in the wood!
And don't you remember the babes in the wood?"

The Nursery Rhyme Book. Andrew Lang. Website: Gutenberg

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Two children were stolen away from their homes and left in the woods. The children tried to escape from the woods, but failed. The birds in the wood and the plants wrapped the children's body up. The village sung and remembered the souls of the children.

I thought the story was very dark. So, in my version I thought I would create a much more pleasant way the children went missing.

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Two children were playing in the garden when a giant bird came and swooped them into his giant basket. He gently took the children to the top of a mountain. The two children looked out into the distance and saw something amazing. Beautiful green pastures, wild flowers and adorable baby animals frolicking in the grass. The pastures were lined with bluebonnets and there were slides and carnival rides all over the place. The pasture had baby pigs, kid goats, ponies, kitten, puppies and everything the children could imagine.

Baby Animals
(Fan Pop)

Unfortunately, the mother and father of these two children were very worried about their well being. So they tried to find the two children in the forest, along with the rest of the village. They looked and looked all night, but did not find any trace of their where abouts. The giant bird that picked up the children, saw the village looking for the children. He carried this news back to the children and they decided to send a letter to their family the next day. The giant bird dropped off the letter to the family's home in the village. 

That night, when the father came home, he saw the letter by the doorstep. He carried the letter into the house and sat down with his wife to read the letter. When they read the letter they cried, but understood why the children choose to be so close to nature. They knew how much the children loved to be take care of themselves and be independent, and they wanted to give their children the opportunity to do just that. 
The two children spent the rest of their lives in the pasture and grew up with the animals. The farmed and cultivated the land. The giant bird that brought them to this oasis, delivered fresh produce to their village for the rest of their days.

The Two Children
(Spoiled Sweet Boutique


2 comments:

  1. I thought the way that you changed the feel of the story was interesting. I like the idea of taking the main points of a story, rhyme, or poem, and changing the connotation of them. I think that is such a cool concept.

    I think it would cool if your story had some dialogue, so that we could get more of a sense of who the children in the story are and be able to relate to them more.

    Great job!

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  2. I’m very glad you decided to lighten up the story a bit! Sometimes it is better to read a story with a happy ending, that one with a dark one. I really enjoyed your writing style as well. I’m glad that the bird still helped the children throughout their lives instead of just singing to them after they had died…

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