This portfolio contains a few of my favorite stories from this
semester. I chose each one because I had
the most fun writing them and exploring new ways to make them unique! They are all
so wonderfully different; from a news article about the death of a turtle to
the daydream of a young girl. I hope you enjoy reading each story as much as I
enjoyed writing them!
Tortoise's Tragic Demise in North England:
This story is written like a newspaper article. Featuring interviews and in
depth investigations this story gives a detailed report into the tragic demise
of a towns beloved turtle.
Amaterasu's Strength: This story is all about girl power!
Amaterasu fights her evil brother to save her mother from the underworld. Talk
about a family reunion!
The Color of My Bluebird: A young girl
is surprised with a gift from her mother. She isn't able to come up with a name
for her new flying friend, but a daydream helps her discover the true origin of
its colors.
Owen's Trip: This is a romantic Welsh story about Owen, who stumbles upon a new wonderful world.
Colleen- The “Tortoise’s Tragic Demise” was so sweet yet heart breaking. I really enjoyed your take on the classic tale. At first I did not realize it was supposed to be fashioned after a news article. It really did not show until later down in the story. You may want to do something at the beginning to present it more as a news article so the format is consistent. The paragraph separation/breaks made sense as far as I could tell. There was a few spelling and grammatical errors throughout the story but with more quick read through and edit I think you can knock those out easily. Your website set up is pleasant to look at and the text stands out against the background and is easy to read. I really enjoyed the story and was glad that you chose it for your portfolio. I really enjoyed the style and cannot wait to read more.
ReplyDeleteHi Colleen! I really like the layout of your site. It is very sleek and easy to navigate around. I also enjoyed seeing the weather forecast option on the page; now that is a nice touch. The corgi hashtags on twitter is a very funny addition as well! I really enjoyed reading your “Amaterasu’s Strength” story. I really liked how you formatted the story into shorter paragraphs. It really helped the flow of the story progress naturally. The conversations in it were also seamless throughout the story and really reflected natural dialogue. I also really liked how Amaterasu was able to confront the powerful Moon God after having a moment of reflection to gain strength. This is such a great thing to add to give a little glimpse into Amaterasu’s mysterious background. It was such a great thing for her to rally behind. I thought you did a great job on this story as a whole.
ReplyDeleteColleen, I really liked the title of your tale: “The Color of My Bluebird,” that is the story I choose to read and critique. First off, the picture you chose was beautiful. I honestly had never taken the time to look at a blue bird up close or even look at a picture of a blue bird carefully. The intricate pattern on the wings and the varying shades of blue are gorgeous, so thank you for bringing that to my attention. Your story was very well written but as I read it I caught a few spelling and grammar errors. They were very minimal and with another quick out loud read through I think you could easily detect and correct them. Other than that your story was great and I really enjoyed it. I am hoping that you add more stories to your portfolio before the end of class so I have more to read. Good job!
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